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Post by Hobbit-eyes on Jul 20, 2006 16:04:20 GMT -5
'The Forgotten Land' - an epic, in seven pages! Telling the story of how Prince Joshua realizes that his father's a tyrant and starts a rebel uprising against him. It involves a five-year-old being hurled from a balcony to her death, which surprises me slightly now that my stories were so dark even back then (I was about 13). In the end, Prince Joshua drags his own father out of a window with him to kill them both. Nice. My teacher wrote 'Interesting vivid imagination' on it.
And 'The Kenekers', my first stab at science fiction, involving tall grey aliens commanded by a Huge Gelationous Blob(TM) kidnapping young kids from their homes and brainwashing them into an invasion force. Now that one REALLY sucked. I was still in my 'Goosebumps' phase.
Oh, and 'Katherine's Diamond' - I really liked the name at that time, it hadn't really dawned on me that it was MY name, so when people asked me why I'd named the evil ghost after myself I got a little confused. Anyway, it's about a diamond necklace which is cursed, and a girl discovering with her friends why a ghost haunts her family (basically, it was her grandmother's fault that a girl called Katherine died, they were fighting over her diamond necklace and she got squashed by a falling chandelier, and she's seeking revenge, as all ghosts do). In the end, they accidentally go back in time, and one of the girl's friends pushes Katherine out of the way of the chandelier and gets squashed herself, changing history so that Katherine never died and never haunted her family, so the girl's parents are still alive, wheee!
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Post by goblingirl on Jul 20, 2006 16:14:28 GMT -5
That's preeeeetty bad.
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Post by Hobbit-eyes on Jul 20, 2006 16:27:04 GMT -5
Yuh. And you haven't even read them. Ohhh, the angst, the slang, the GRAMMATICAL ERRORS...
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Post by goblingirl on Jul 20, 2006 16:32:07 GMT -5
The Mary-sues? Mine are sadly rife within all stories I wrote pre-11.
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Post by Hobbit-eyes on Jul 20, 2006 16:48:51 GMT -5
No, actually, they're relatively Mary-Sue free.... I'm actually kinda proud of the Forgotten Land, looking back on it. Four main characters die! And there are only five! Joss Whedon would be proud.
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Post by goblingirl on Jul 20, 2006 16:54:04 GMT -5
Could I read it?
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Post by Hobbit-eyes on Jul 20, 2006 16:54:53 GMT -5
If I can find it... There are also two versions, the 'Teacher Version', where the five-year-old doesn't die, and the 'Author's Cut', where she does, woe.
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Post by goblingirl on Jul 20, 2006 17:02:27 GMT -5
Why 'Teacher Version'?
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Post by Hobbit-eyes on Jul 20, 2006 17:46:08 GMT -5
I didn't think the Teacher would like me axing the five-year-old, so I cut it.
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Post by goblingirl on Jul 20, 2006 17:51:53 GMT -5
Fair enough.
How did the 5-year-old die?
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Post by Hobbit-eyes on Jul 20, 2006 18:30:48 GMT -5
Got dropped off a balcony by Joshua's father when he refused to back down.
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Post by gio on Jul 21, 2006 18:32:54 GMT -5
I gave war sci fi a go, but I lack imagination. My proudest moment is getting an A grade for an essay on descriptive writing where I ripped off Devil May Cry
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Post by goblingirl on Jul 22, 2006 8:32:32 GMT -5
What's Devil May Cry?
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